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City Lights
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Views: 29
Comments: 6
Created 3 years, 6 months ago
Edited 3 years, 6 months ago
Category: Feature Film
Genres: Comedy
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Comments
Gregory D Goyins (Sent 3 years, 6 months ago)
Well, it wont write itself.
LOL.
Your first comment.
I wish you all the creativity your Muse can muster and all the good fortune Tyche can drum up.

Give a holler.
Always willing to help and KEEP WRITING.

Namaste,
Greg
Gregory D Goyins (Sent 3 years, 6 months ago)
I think that you have the editor set to set this up like a TV or a stage play.

Not really sure if the formatting comments I have made transfer over well into that so take everything I have said with a grain of salt.

I would write this like a short film anyway. That's just me. Even though there are to be multiple episodes. Cause that's what I have a wheelhouse of comfortability in.
john ruddy (Sent 3 years, 6 months ago)
Good work. Well, worked dialog.
This is my first comment on Zhura.

For me the logistics of the opening stopped the action, eg. +six guys rush out, -4 go down stairs = one guy standing. The stats interuppted my eyeball's trip to the end of the page. Disregard my comment, if these numbers are central to the plot.

"Boy next door" look? What's that?
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Robert Blair (Sent 3 years, 6 months ago)
I wasn't really what I was looking for, Vic
Vic Formosa (Sent 3 years, 6 months ago)
You have no idea what was gonna happen.
Vic Formosa (Sent 3 years, 6 months ago)
That's why I left it as a cliffhanger.