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Witch - Pilot
(Based on 4 ratings)
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Views: 47
Comments: 9
Created 1 year, 1 month ago
Edited 7 months, 3 weeks ago
Category: Feature Film
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Paul Hefley (Sent 1 year, 1 month ago)
Not a bad start. I'm interested to see where you take this. I noticed a few formatting issues, but otherwise, it's good.

Try to eliminate the word 'is' as much as possible. For you instance, you wrote, "The hallway is empty." This could be written simply as, "An empty hallway."

'Is', 'the', and 'that' are often superfluous. So look to get rid of them whenever possible. If you do, your reader will appreciate it.

Keep writing!
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Fiona Leonard (Sent 1 year, 4 weeks ago)
I really liked it.
  • (4/5 stars)
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Fiona Leonard (Sent 1 year, 4 weeks ago)
This is very good. I'm really enjoying reading this. (Alice is AWESOME!)
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Elizabeth Sabourin (Sent 1 year, 4 weeks ago)
It was just okay.
  • (3/5 stars)
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Elizabeth Sabourin (Sent 1 year, 4 weeks ago)
There are some spelling mistakes, and none of the characters are really developed yet. For being 7 pages in, I should have some idea of who the main character is besides a seeming anorexic.

Still, I think it has potential. =)
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Kinsey Hallaway (Sent 1 year, 3 weeks ago)
Thanks so much for the comments guys! This is definitely a work in progress. So far editing has not happened. And yeah, Alice is kind of awesome.
Connor Petrey (Sent 1 year, 2 weeks ago)
I loved it!
  • (5/5 stars)
Connor Petrey (Sent 1 year, 2 weeks ago)
Will you please read my Script Simply Insane and rate it.
Jonathan Robinson (Sent 1 year, 1 week ago)
thought it was okay. lacks a visual. I do think the writer has alot of talent. and this "idea" has potential.
  • (3/5 stars)