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The Happy Project (Rewrite)
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Views: 53
Comments: 21
Created 3 years, 5 months ago
Edited 2 years, 3 months ago
Category: Feature Film
Key Words: Happy, project, rewrite, second draft
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Stripes (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
Whoohoo. Gonna try and rewrite this one, too. I've refined the characters and story a bit more, so this'll all make sense.

Yes.

Indeed so.
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Jeff (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
I didn't read past the first few pages of the old one, but it was the first thing I ever read of yours. Was this the one with the crazy opening of the dude running from the choppers??

If it is, I did indeed love that opening. It was cool. I've got a lot goin on right now (writing wise, also personally) but I'd like to keep an eye on the rewrite. Good luck!
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Jeff (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
"That just means you have to spend more time with Daddy. What game to you want to play?"

Found a typo. Should read "do", not "to".
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Stripes (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
Heh. Actually, it was a girl. And I found that opening had been used before. Don't worry, though, I'm working on a similar action-type grabber right now.
And thanks for catching the typo. I was writing really late last night :)
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Chad Fleagle (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
It's cool to see you're back on this one, Emma. I really didn't find the beginning of the first version that bad at all.

Keep punching that keyboard.
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Stripes (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
Thanks a lot for the comment, Chad :)

Commence keyboard punching. :D
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Josh Mcmullin (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
Okay so I loved the first (and UNFINISHED!!!!) version of this and this opening IS WAAAAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYYYYY different! BUT! I like it. I like it alot actually. It's EXTREMELY good. It's keeping me interested, oh AND i'm really glad you have established more of a dynamic relationship between Alexis and Travis, and you've done so in very very little time. I really really REALLY like it.
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Stripes (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
Thanks for the comment, Josh! And such a nice one, too. :)

Yes, haha, the opening is a lot different... I'm still trying to work out the bugs, it doesn't seem dynamic enough, for me. But thank you very, very much for the compliment and reassurance!
Thanks again. :) You're too kind.

Check out Kev Ryan's spoof version, it's hilarious. :P
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Kevin Ryan (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
Ha ha thanks for the publicity Emma,

(I've been reading the story before I've changed it) so I like that opening scene, but I agree with you could make it more dynamic, unfortunately I've no ideas how, but I'd imagine if you keep writing this then something will pop into your head at some stage.

Actually a second thought, I just realised that making a spoof version also makes it easy to read and review this, and more fun :)
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Adam Finelli (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
(Please see my e-mail)
  • (3/5 stars)
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D. A. Washington (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
Okay, I was reading script and it came to an end. I guess you can say I'm reading as you write. So far so good. Emma. I'll come back, shortly to see how it progresses.
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D. A. Washington (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
I really liked it. And I'm not just saying that. Joy seems to be an interesting character.
  • (4/5 stars)
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Josh Mcmullin (Sent 3 years, 5 months ago)
Noticed that you changed the beginning again. It's really cool and I like it. so keep it coming. oh and MERRY CHRISTMAS! (I doubt I'll be on within the next few days because of work and I thought I'd go ahead through it out there)
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Stephen Rose (Sent 3 years, 4 months ago)
I really dig your style can't wait to read more.
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Tess Hatfield (Sent 3 years, 4 months ago)
What a suspenseful way to leave off! Now I really want to know what happens. Your style is crisp, making it a pleasure to read. The only parts that are a little murky are the telephone conversations- the location switches back and forth so quickly that sometimes it is easy to loose track. Everything else I think has already been mentioned.

Also, love how you describe Travis as a golden retriever. That made me smile.
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Josh Mcmullin (Sent 2 years, 11 months ago)
So glad to see you back and writing. Hope to see it more often.
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Barret L. Bowman (Sent 2 years, 10 months ago)
Looks like you've been post poning this project =)
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Barret L. Bowman (Sent 2 years, 10 months ago)
Keep up so there I can read more!
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Stripes (Sent 2 years, 10 months ago)
Thank you so much, everyone. <3 :)
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Alexander M. Dietrich (Sent 2 years, 10 months ago)
I loved it! It has a very good blend of humor and drama. Poor guy, just keeps picking up strays.

It took me a little while to realize that Joy was the little girl. I think you wrote her very well. She comes across as robotic and emotionless, but the flashbacks help you sympathize with her.

Alexis is the key, isn't she? The string that will connect all of them.

Keep going! I can't wait to read more.

~Alexander
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Alexander M. Dietrich (Sent 2 years, 10 months ago)
Page 11. Mewling kitten! Sorry, I thought it was funny.