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I-NEVER
(Based on 10 ratings)
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Views: 158
Comments: 7
Created 4 years, 8 months ago
Edited 11 months, 2 weeks ago
Category: Comedy Sketch
Genres: Comedy
Idea: I-NEVER
Key Words: drinking game, dinner party, SNL
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Comments
Martin Ryan (Sent 4 years, 7 months ago)
funny, great premise. all sorts of possibilities i.e. "I never cheated on my spouse with my spouse's best friend" and it gets even more personal and ugly! this is a great game to play if you are into drinking games. hilarious stuff!
Kelly Farmer (Sent 4 years, 7 months ago)
Nice job guys! I laughed OUT LOUD at the switch you made to Harold's role - turning the dog thing back on him. LOVE the new ending.
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Jeffry A. DeCola (Sent 4 years, 7 months ago)
WOW, thanks to all the contributors. It's coming along. There was a little confusion with some names, so i cleaned it up. Feel free to RE_VOTE!!! :)
Peter Landecker (Sent 4 years, 2 months ago)
You don't need to explain the rules. The audience will figure em out. A dangerous game makes for a good scene.
Joseph R. Mancini (Sent 4 years, 2 months ago)
It made me laugh, but saturday night live has done shit like this a hundred million times, i do think the dialogue was pretty good towards the middle.
Norm Laviolette (Sent 4 years, 2 months ago)
Fun piece. Can you lose some of the exposition up front? It's pretty heavy in lines like "

Honey, I’m not sure that’s an appropriate game for my new boss, his wife, and his parents...

It seems like this line is there to obviously tell us who everyone is. It becomes more organic or real if you let this info come out over the course of the scene. Something to always keep in mind is that whenever possible SHOW don't TELL.

I would also keep working on the ending. Try a whole bunch of different endings. Really heighten the hell out of it. Then you can draw it back in, but at least this may get you to some places you never would have thought of.
Gloria (Sent 4 years, 1 week ago)
Even though these comments are little late, I have to leave them, that would be me, isn't it odd given the right circumstances the characters either pick up on cues like "grumpy bastard" or some of the other innuendos that fromance these people. Little plays, a couple of drinks a lot can be done under those circumstances when people get a little loose.