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The Rose Parade
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Comments: 1
Created 2 years, 1 week ago
Edited 10 months, 2 weeks ago
Category: Feature Film
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Annamae Tezuka (Sent 1 year, 10 months ago)
This is a really engrossing script; I've been entranced al the way through. I do have one minor grammatical issue on page 32: Seamus says "If we only were supposed to eat vegetables," which to me implies that he is wistful they could eat vegetables. I think if you change to "If we were supposed to eat only vegetables" or something on that order, it would convey the meaning that humans are not supposed to only eat vegetables.

Other than that, though, this story is great! It's highly emotionally charged.