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Day 72
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Comments: 10
Created 1 year, 11 months ago
Edited 4 months, 2 weeks ago
Category: Feature Film
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Jeff (Sent 1 year, 11 months ago)
Okay, some formatting issues: First off, when giving character descriptions, no need for parenthesis. Also it's 30s, not 30's. Common mistakes I was making also up until about about a month ago.

Also, why is your character name "A MAN" when you've already introduced him to us as "ERIC GRANGE"? Just make it ERIC GRANGE.

Pg. 1 - "Kevin reaches over into the trunk and pulls out a bag. He unzips the bag." Try this: "Kevin reaches into the trunk, pulls out a bag, and unzips it."

I like the brother relationship. For a war movie, I hope you've done some research and aren't just basing it on movies you've seen. Otherwise, it will end up very generic and filled with cliche's. Good luck!
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Ryan Croft (Sent 1 year, 11 months ago)
Thank you for the help. The reason for the man thing is for a twist in the end. Also, do you know where I could find good research on this stuff?
Thanks again, Ryan
Christopher Racioppo (Sent 1 year, 11 months ago)
Planning on having a twist where the brother reveals he has a vagina?
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Ryan Croft (Sent 1 year, 11 months ago)
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Ricky Rauls (Sent 1 year, 11 months ago)
I like it, except for a few spelling errors it was a good script. I want to see where you go with this.
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Ryan Croft (Sent 1 year, 11 months ago)
Thanks I'm just trying to get everything down and then I'll go back and work on the spelling errors.
Jeff (Sent 1 year, 11 months ago)
Also, you have "MAN" and then "A MAN". Sorry lol. I just saw that and I need to finish my read through for ya. Will get to it soon.
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Ryan Croft (Sent 1 year, 11 months ago)
Already fixed lol
adam joyce (Sent 1 year, 11 months ago)
What's the point of having a silencer when they just blew up a humvee? You'd think all bets (ie: stealth) are off at that point wouldn't you?
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Ryan Croft (Sent 1 year, 10 months ago)
Your right! thanks now how do you like it?