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Universal Man Pet (comedy/sci-fi/drama)
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Views: 107
Comments: 4
Created 1 year, 11 months ago
Edited 1 week, 5 days ago
Category: Feature Film
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Cody Strand (Sent 1 year, 10 months ago)
Hey! I really like the dry humor of this, if that's what you were going for. Love the alien bits. The thing that I noticed format wise, is that action lines should never be over 4 lines long, so find a way to shorten them up and break them apart, so instead of one big paragraph you have a few short ones that are easier on the eyes. Otherwise it's really funny. There are some really minor spelling errors too, but that isn't hard to fix. Keep plugging!
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Dawn Chapman (Sent 1 year, 10 months ago)
Hi Tom,


You're right I do like this story, but your formatting is way off. Of course you really want to get the story out your head, but I'd suggest reading as many scripts as you can produced and un-produced. You'll pick it up really quickly, because it's not too hard.

I do think you'll get there, just keep plugging at it.

I'd suggest taking a look at 'most useful post ever' in the general discussion group here.

Take care and keep writing.

Dawn
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Phil Rockwell (Sent 1 year, 10 months ago)
Tom,
ACTION LINES- remove the word 'is' and the word 'see'.
SLUG LINES- most of them are done wrong.

INT. JOE'S HOUSE - KITCHEN - DAY
INT. CAR - NIGHT
EXT. HARRY'S HOUSE - NIGHT

Remove all parenthetical comments from dialogue.

Show the reader how characters feel so that the reader identifies with them.

Have fun writing,
Phil
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Special Man .com (Sent 1 year, 10 months ago)
Thanks for taking an interest Phil. I appreciate any advice concerning my bad format. I like to take time to fix some of my formatting issues when I'm unsure where the story is going. Hopefully you'll see some of your advice being put to use in the next few days.