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Scripts from Same Idea

Nothing here right now.
Light
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Views: 17
Comments: 3
Created 1 year, 11 months ago
Edited 1 year, 10 months ago
Category: TV Pilot
Genres: Action, Drama
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Comments
D. A. Washington (Sent 1 year, 10 months ago)
Hey there, Patrick. Thought I'd stop by to check out Light, and I must say that you're off to a great start. A few typos here and there, and a few places in your action lines where one line should be in the same block with another. Example:

"A woman looks at David. She is still on her cot. She's attractive, smart, and young.

Her name is BETH (late 20s)."

That should be in the same block of action since we can see all of this in one shot. The only reason I point this out is so that a false page count can be avoided.

What is this place? Some type of criminal or mental institution? I guess that will be answered as the script progresses.

Good luck...

Peace and Blessings

DA
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Patrick Brennan (Sent 1 year, 10 months ago)
Thanks DA. Once I'm finished I'll go through the whole thing and clean it up. I like to break up alot of stuff when I'm first writing it because I think it's easier to catch errors.

You'll find out at least a part of the mystery when I finish the second act...and I can guarantee your mind's gonna get blown.
D. A. Washington (Sent 1 year, 10 months ago)
I understand. It does make it easier to catch errors... I'm looking forward to it. Judging by the first 8 pages, it's exactly what I'm expecting.

DA